“5.06 First Draft” – FLVS Journalism Assignment

For this assessment you must complete a multiple-choice quiz in preparation for beginning your first draft. You may wish to review the information you have learned in this lesson to make sure you are comfortable with the stylistic rules of news writing.

Once you feel comfortable with style, you should get to work on writing your first draft. In the next lesson you will need to have a draft completed, so begin writing as soon as possible.


 

First Draft:

On April 20th, 2010, the Gulf of Mexico, was flooded with thousands of gallons of crude oil, gushing from an underwater oil well. With this huge disaster affecting places all around us, this question is raised “How will this effect our marine environment?” With people all over the country wondering this very same thing, I think it’s time we address this very important issue. Offshore oil drilling is dangerous for our oceans, there has to be some way that we can make it less dangerous.

According to Justin Williams, from the National Ocean Industries Association he says he has seen ” the attitude I have gaged especially in the last few years, is that companies are putting such more of a focus on safety. ” He goes on to say that with the example of the settlement amounts that BP had to pay the local, state, and federal governments, after the Deepwater Horizon spill, it would be in oil companies best interest be more safe, considering how much it will cost them if they are not. But it doesn’t seem that that is phasing oil companies. Just this past May a Texas based company has an oil spill in California effecting several miles of coastline, and spilling about 142,800 gallons of crude oil spilled, with 21,000 of those gallons spilling directly into the ocean off Santa Barbara county Calif. The cause? A corroded pipeline ruptured. Ten years ago, this same compnay reached a deal with the Environmental Protection Agency, and the Justice Department, to pay more than $40 million and according to CNN ” The settlement, including a $3.2 million penalty, resolved violations of the Clean Water Act stemming from 10 oil spills in four U.S. states from 2004 to 2007. ” It doesn’t seem to me that the “cost factor” is really keeping oil companies in check.

Sadly it looks like the advice that Scott Sanders would give these companies about oil spill protection is not being implemented.¬† ” I would say that projects of that nature need to assess what kind of impact their gonna have on the environment so that they can plan their project in a way that avoids as many of those impacts as possible, and where they can’t avoid of minimize they need to have a plan to mitigate or to offset any unavoidable impacts associated with the project.”

All these devastating effects that offshore oil drilling have on our beautiful oceans are long lasting. They are not able to just be washed away, or cleaned up instantaneously. Scientists investigating the long-term impacts of the Exxon Valdez spill estimated that nearly 20,000 gallons of oil from that spill remain in Prince William Sound, 26 years later, continuing to harm threatened and endangered species, and undermine their recovery. Most likely we will be looking at this very same thing in the areas of the Gulf of Mexico, with the Deepwater Horizon spill, and the Santa Barbara county coastline.

 

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“5.05 Lead Sentence and Outline” – FLVS Journalism Assignment

For this assessment you must create an outline for your news story and draft a lead sentence. Your sentence must meet the following requirements:

  1. It must be between 20 and 30 words long.
  2. It must address at least three of the WWWWWH questions.
  3. It must provide essential information to the reader.
  4. It must use active structure.
  5. It must be written without expression of opinion.

 

Lead Sentence: On April 20th, 2010, the Gulf of Mexico, was flooded with thousands of gallons of crude oil, gushing from an underwater oil well. With this huge disaster affecting places all around us, this question is raised “How will this effect our marine environment?”

 

Outline  

Paragraph 1:

  • Lead Sentence
  • Introduction

Paragraph 2:

  • What the experts say
  • Why it’s bad

Paragraph 3:

  • Brief summary
  • Conclusion